yardım(argumentative essay)

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arkadaşlar yazdığım essayi bi kontrol edebilir misiniz acaba grammer hataları neler veya nasıl daha iyi yazabilirim??

'It is obvious that men are smarter than women.'
         
         There has been so-called equality of women and men in modern world for
many years.In fact,  women who are regarded as ignorant people by some
underdeveloped societies accepting that men are superior than women are stil humiliated relentlessly.This situation raise a great debate as to whether men are smarter than women.In my opinion, women cannot exhibit their skills cecause of the fact that they have less chance and fewer rights throught the history.


         One of the primary reasons why I do not support this vision is that women have less chance to show themselves.For the sake of example, a woman having a job focus her attention on not only her work but also their children by devoting half-time to them loverly as she is in charge of their development.Therefore, she cannot spend time improving their talents in other fields such as discovering or inventing technological devices.


         When it comes to the right which women possess throught the history , it can undeniably said,in this respect, that they are fewer than men’s prominently.Whereas some low brow communities provide women with only several rights such as right tol ive, women should not be expected to stand out by exploring something fort his community due to the fact that they even restrict women’s freedom .


             On the other hand , some opponents assert that the majority of women are bad at analytical disciplines.Presumably, they are little justifiable but there is a point the supporters of this sight are missing.If women deprive of analytical disciplines, there would not be many famous strong women who are in charge of a large number of employees in business world.Considering the fact that it may occasionally be impossible to get on with one person, it is deduced that women achieving this success cannot be more unintelligent human beings than men.


            It can be concluded that altough interventions carried out by some societies such as giving them fewer rights and  women have a great deal of responsibilities with regard to their work, their children and so on , they may amazingly be successful in their lives.Beyond all question, this success is enough to prove to be wrong that men are smarter than women .

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'It is obvious that men are smarter than women.'
          
         There has been so-called belief such as the equality of women and men in modern world. In fact,  women, regarded as ignorant people by some
underdeveloped societies accepting that men are superior than women, are stil humiliated relentlessly.This situation raises a great debate as to whether men are smarter than women.In my opinion, women cannot exhibit their skills because of the fact that they have less chance and fewer rights throught the history.


         One of the primary reasons why I do not support this vision is that women have less chance to show themselves.For the sake of example, a woman having a job focuses her attention on not only her work but also their children by devoting half-time to them loverly (?) as she is in charge of their development.Therefore, she cannot spend time improving their talents in other fields such as inventing technological devices, or discovering something.


         When it comes to the right, owned by women throught the history , it can be undeniably said,in this respect, that they are fewer than men’s prominently.Whereas some low brow communities provide women with only several rights such as right to live, women should not be expected to stand out by exploring something for this community due to the fact that they even restrict women’s freedom .


             On the other hand , some opponents assert that the majority of women are bad at analytical disciplines.Presumably, they are little justifiable but there is a point, the supporters of this sight are missing.If women deprived of analytical disciplines, there would not be many famous strong women who are in charge of a large number of employees in business world.Considering the fact that it may occasionally be impossible to get on with one person, it is deduced that women achieving this success cannot be more unintelligent human beings than men.


            It can be concluded that although interventions carried out by some societies such as giving women fewer rights but many other responsibilities  such as child-care, housework and so on, besides their careers , they may amazingly be successful in their lives. Beyond all these questions, this success is enough to prove to be wrong that men are smarter than women .

[Üye Bilgileri]

çok teşekkür ederim emeğine sağlık:) bikaç sorum olucak 'it can undeniably be said' olabilir mi, son paragraftaki 'but' ı ne anlamda kullandın yani cümlenin o kısmını çeviremedim, bi de içerik olarak nasıl onu merak ediyorum:)

[Üye Bilgileri]

            It can be concluded that although interventions carried out by some societies such as giving women fewer rights but many other responsibilities  such as child-care, housework and so on, besides their careers , they may amazingly be successful in their lives. Beyond all these questions, this success is enough to prove to be wrong that men are smarter than women .

kadınlara çok az hak tanıyıp (hak tanıyan ancak...), kariyerlerinin yanı sıra  çocuk bakımı, ev işi vs bir çok sorumluluk yükleyen bazı toplumlardaki bu engellemelere rağmen,

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teşekkür ederim:)

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